tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post7123298069533759850..comments2024-03-28T04:07:58.140-07:00Comments on Fiction and Film: Leave Me Breathless BlogfestKate Larkindalehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06202347563426692610noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-26366645968921891982011-10-23T19:50:36.382-07:002011-10-23T19:50:36.382-07:00Thank you for participating in Can You Leave Us Br...Thank you for participating in Can You Leave Us Breathless? Blogfest Contest. Your entry has been judged.<br /><br />Good luck!<br /><br />The Judges<br />(Connie, Joannine, Marissa, and Brenda)Brenda Drakehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01263237745979525170noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-9615667449094681472011-10-23T14:29:21.421-07:002011-10-23T14:29:21.421-07:00Nice but I wondered about the rest of the kissers&...Nice but I wondered about the rest of the kissers' bodies at the beginning of the scene. I liked the way you inserted taste.Katharina Gerlachhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00223722392075669331noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-20482557479037923342011-10-23T09:36:16.012-07:002011-10-23T09:36:16.012-07:00That was hot! Especially with the internal strugg...That was hot! Especially with the internal struggle with guilt.Nicki Elsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11412032684225126973noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-76967161795525680112011-10-22T19:03:35.573-07:002011-10-22T19:03:35.573-07:00Thanks everyone! So glad you like it. It's a...Thanks everyone! So glad you like it. It's always so scary to reveal a piece of something new and untested...Kate Larkindalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06202347563426692610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-10303476400040579862011-10-22T17:16:12.391-07:002011-10-22T17:16:12.391-07:00Nice and the conflict was nice too. Great job.Nice and the conflict was nice too. Great job.E. Arroyohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06634213563563094173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-37325770495107890362011-10-22T16:06:21.038-07:002011-10-22T16:06:21.038-07:00I really liked the specific details ('The flav...I really liked the specific details ('The flavor of wine...'and 'her lipstick, smeared now...' are a great lines). Also, very nice ending for this shortened piece.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-92206686121705473752011-10-22T12:54:05.351-07:002011-10-22T12:54:05.351-07:00I enjoyed reading this scene. Your attention to de...I enjoyed reading this scene. Your attention to detail and how you worked the MC's internal conflict into the story as well. beautifully done!Cecilia Roberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04416564789369523352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-71859036986180171952011-10-22T05:50:27.456-07:002011-10-22T05:50:27.456-07:00I agree with the others. This scene was intense. G...I agree with the others. This scene was intense. Great job.Tracey Josephhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16403588874051092286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-70176705640236923602011-10-21T22:34:08.216-07:002011-10-21T22:34:08.216-07:00I always love your tight writing and amaaaazing de...I always love your tight writing and amaaaazing detail!!!!!!<br /><br />Very intense! :)Melindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11542106414099032742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-54974750883018112002011-10-21T18:54:52.263-07:002011-10-21T18:54:52.263-07:00Thanks for the feedback!
And thanks for the note...Thanks for the feedback!<br /><br />And thanks for the note Juiliana! I'll change the color now...Kate Larkindalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06202347563426692610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-61024267108356774792011-10-21T18:43:14.576-07:002011-10-21T18:43:14.576-07:00Oooo, I love this Kate!
(As a side note, in my re...Oooo, I love this Kate!<br /><br />(As a side note, in my reader this comes up as bright yellow against the white background of reader. It looks great on your site but is soo hard to read over there!)Juliana L. Brandthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15903360100714298208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-54577287037543171862011-10-21T11:55:14.932-07:002011-10-21T11:55:14.932-07:00Wow...umm...wow. Spicy and intense. Fantastic ^_^Wow...umm...wow. Spicy and intense. Fantastic ^_^Loralie Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07134452749240292803noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-33828764821701786892011-10-21T11:17:47.104-07:002011-10-21T11:17:47.104-07:00You've added a nice touch of inner conflict wi...You've added a nice touch of inner conflict without distracting from the intensity of the scene. Great writingKaleenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03104611823742775404noreply@blogger.com