tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post4242800712669019638..comments2024-03-18T11:06:08.677-07:00Comments on Fiction and Film: 300 word pitchKate Larkindalehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06202347563426692610noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-5777039967124154322011-01-05T13:35:26.947-08:002011-01-05T13:35:26.947-08:00Thanks Michael!
I've just written a new one w...Thanks Michael!<br /><br />I've just written a new one which I've put in the sidebar where I have info about my novels. I think I like this one better....<br /><br />X K8Kate Larkindalehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06202347563426692610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7363187649278189370.post-83502037341342191162011-01-04T21:58:27.204-08:002011-01-04T21:58:27.204-08:00Hey, Kate. I remember this story. I'll make a ...Hey, Kate. I remember this story. I'll make a couple of suggestions that hit me as I read it. One quick nit to pick, you use "an creative writing" instead of "a creative writing."<br /><br />Also, in the first paragraph, you use "explored" and "exploring. It sounds a bit repetitive. I'd suggest changing one of them to another word just for variety. The last part of the second paragraph is a bit vague and confusing after the em dash. You say it's a "possible outcome" and then make it sound like everyone has already abandoned her. I think you can make it clearer.<br /><br />I really like the ending of the next to last paragraph, and I think you might be better off ending it there rather than adding the last paragraph. It kind of weakens the impact of what's going on before.<br /><br />Just my suggestions. I hope they're helpful.<br /><br />MichaelAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11277050810405207727noreply@blogger.com